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I first encountered this story, which is a sequel to a commissioned story, ages and ages ago on FA.  Don't remember specifically when, but it had been a while.  Recently, I found that the author was on SoFurry as well, and had posted a couple new chapters to the story, which I found myself a little surprised to be eager to read.  Honestly, I just wished that downloading stories was much less of a pain on SF, but there's not a lot I can do about that.  The writing wasn't the reason I was surprised at my eagerness, but it had more to do with the subject matter: cuckolding. 

Now, every cuckolding story  pretty much follows the same storyline.  For one reason or another, a married or long-term relationship between two partners is introduced to a third, and that third (the bull, I think) is seen as more and better sexually than one of the other partners.  If it goes on longer, than the cuckold is gradually getting less and less sex while the bull (I think those are the terms for it) gets more, up to and including inviting friends and associates to enjoy the cuckold's significant other.  Also, the bull is usually an asshole dominant personality. 

On an intellectual level, this pisses me off.  I get a pretty visceral reaction and really want the bull to stop being such an asshole, and generally wondering how they are able to seduce the significant other.  To that end, the story is almost never from the bull's point of view, but more from the cuckold's, so the reader is dragged along while they feel the pain of this jerk not only butting in on their relationship, but them getting very much the short stick while they're pushed around more and more, coupled with a dichotomous raging arousal as this is happening. And if the story is written well and gets into heavier stuff, I end up feeling rather divided as naughty things happen while the cuckold is usually staring at the other two. 

Specific to this story, a fox has just brought home a wolf to meet his human wife as the second chapter begins.  They all went to high school together and this is some years later, where a desire to keep his wife happy has lead the fox to seek out the wolf (who bullied him and stole his girlfriends) to perhaps spice up their sex life, never guessing that the wolf's assholish personality would lead to a secretive blow job (said fox is straight) in a bar followed by being dragged to his car by his dick, literally.  The wolf then proceeds to seduce the initially pissed off wife through a sob story and alcohol, all in the face of the increasingly hesitant fox. 

By this point, it's a runaway train that couldn't be stopped, so he's left to watch while the dominant jerk of a wolf bangs his wife like she's never been banged before, creating a bit of an addict in the process.  Though he initially benefits with a huge upswing in his own sex life, the wolf comes over more and more often and while he's at work, and there's less and less for him until by the fourth chapter, he's explicitly told that he won't be getting any.  This being after the wolf and a co-worker double team the poor wife in another room, with the fox brought in to clean her up with his tongue in the aftermath. 

The writing is the primary reason that I enjoy reading this so much.  Though it deals with a subject that would piss me off in any normal circumstance, it's so good that I found myself enjoying it and wanting to read more, if only to find out how messed up the relationship would go from there.  The writer seems to find great joy in the fox's distress, and that comes through in the story especially with all the ultimately tragic erections said fox has to deal with as he's browbeaten into accepting this new routine and lifestyle. 

To recap, despite the subject matter I would recommend giving this a shot if you're looking for something new to read.  If you find yourself become angry or upset, don't worry, you're supposed to feel that way. 

Unless you're some kind of heartless, asshole wolf.
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Now, here's the very interesting thing about this story.  It tackled something that would probably be a question that somebody has to have asked at some point, which is to say exactly how are hybrids born, here?  Literally, how did they come out of the womb? 

Anybody who's been in or around the furry fandoms knows that hybrids are totally a Thing.  Tigersharks, wolfoxes, so on and so forth.  If you have the opportunity to make combinations of things, it either has been made or congratulations, you're the first one to make it!  Maybe.  But until now, generally I've just seen a bunch of handwaving as to how these combinations are actually brought into the world. 

The story starts with a male raccoon obstetrician helping out a couple that wants to, as much as possible, give birth naturally.  The issue, however, is that the mother's a cat, and the father's a bear.  It goes onto say that hybrid kids usually take after either the mother's or the father's species, but the size of the child can be either, which neatly establishes the rules for this particular universe.  And in this particular case, it's a big baby. 

Now, the story gets to the crux of the issue for the doctor when the baby is safely delivered, the parents prayed and thanked God for the safe delivery.  This rankles the doc because though he respected the parents' wishes for as natural a delivery as possible, he feels like Rodney Dangerfield; he gets no respect. 

The actual mechanics of the writing is pretty good, though it does ramble a little bit.  There are some, for me, curious word choices and perhaps an over-reliance on adverbs with dialogue tags.  But it is solid writing, and despite a name near the end that took me out of the story a little bit (Thrunder?  This is a name?), I did find myself enjoying the story. 

Overall, I think that you guys should check out Evertide and this story, and maybe say some nice things.  Apparently he's had a low opinion of his own writing.
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Twitter lead me to this story, however indirectly.  And it was fairly indirect.  I was lead to an author who had an array of stories, and I picked one at random for the amusing title.  This just goes to show you that titles are important, kids.  A good title will hook somebody, even a snob like myself.  It helps that it is punny.  But it also put my guard up. 

You see, I soon found out that the story was fan fiction.  Being pretty much the gateway to writing, fan fiction often ends up being the first kind of stuff that the budding author writes.  And very often, it almost painfully reflects the skill level of the writer.  This also means that when the writer is good, the fan fiction can be pretty damn good. 

I couldn't find many technical problems with the story, if any at all.  My problems primarily stemmed from it being a World of Warcraft story, with a bit of an indelicate "what class are you" discussion and a bit of a plot device that drives the protagonist and another character to a particular inn.  But aside of that... well, the story was quite good.  As a matter of fact, if you're into a WoW gay porn fic, then I would recommend it you at least give it a shot.  Link is here. 

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I think Kyell Gold dropped the ball a bit when he wrote Bridges, because there are bridges in almost every sense of the word except for an actual, physical bridge.  If you think about it, the bridges are everywhere.  The city is named Gateway, even!  And, of course, there's the bridge of Heyward, called Hey, the sultry, sexy fox who builds bridges between people using his own body.  The story's first three chapters detail his escapades in that respect, and really it's interesting how you get the three perspectives of it, from three very different characters.  Trust me when I say it gets quite steamy during the sexy bits, but by the third time I found myself drifting away from the heat and toward the differences between the scenes and the characters in them.  Because quite honestly, if you're going to relieve the same thing three times, there had better be some considerable differences between the scenes, and I think it was pulled off quite well. 

Even though the story only touches on his perspective for one chapter, it's quite clear that the story is about the flirty fox, as everything in there seems to revolve around his many, many connections.  Though I have to say, that's gotta be the hottest way to hook somebody up.  But as you get into the nitty-gritty of who Heyward is and why he does what he does, it is gratifying to see that somebody finally seems to care about the bridge itself, rather than the areas it connects.

If I must admit something against the story, it's the fact that the illustrations are a bit underwhelming... but that's probably because I'm spoiled by Blotch's stuff. 

But in short, if you're looking for a pretty hot story that is definitely about bridges, then go pick up Bridges.  Do it.  Now.

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